Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We are all aware that the quality of time that parents spend during the childhood of their kids is a milestone to ensuring a bright life. Therefore, hard-working parents are pretty concerned about how to employ their limited free time with their kids to gain the best possible outcomes. I believe that busy parents should dedicate that precious time in fun and sports with their children rather than helping them in their studies. I feel this way for two reasons that I will explore in the subsequent essay.
First and foremost, parental involvement in fun and sports with kids is a form of investment in their future careers to develop beneficial skills and competencies. For example, most prestigious universities compete over the outstanding athletic students, offering them many privileges such as scholarships, which elevate their debt and make them concentrate on their academic studies instead of working to pay their expenses. A recent statistic shows that most talented athletes in baseball and basketball were training with their parents at an early age because they communicate better with their parents and thrive in active, high-energy status. As you can see, if it were not for their parents' sharing that specific sport with their kids, they would not have been recognized.
Secondly, growing up with parents who share fun and joyful time means living in an ideal relaxing atmosphere, which creates a profound bond of love that sustains a lifetime. For instance, my parents were extremely busy as full-timers throughout my childhood. However, they managed to commit their leisure time every Saturday to have fun, watching movies, or going out for a walk with us. I still can recall beach time in Alexandria, my hometown, where my dad gave me my first lesson in swimming, and my mom taught me the racketball. As a result, we are all as brothers and sisters have unforgettable memories full of passion and emotions for our parents. Therefore, we are sentimentally attached to them and still gather every Saturday in our parent's home despite being busy.
In conclusion, I believe that preoccupied parents will spend their worthy time efficiently if they focus on entertaining their kids. It is not only for their future development but also for strengthening parent-child relationships.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1933.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16844919786 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83222737621 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582887700535 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3375792665 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.8125 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.375 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270796848338 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984758447217 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744093107911 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180961290683 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577151183948 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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