TPO 30: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We are all aware that one's satisfaction with work reflects considerably on our sense of happiness. Some people think that working only three days a week for long hours is enjoyable, others disagree. Honestly, I reckon that working five days a week for shorter hours contributes more to our enjoyment.
First of all, working daily for short hours is more effective as it guarantees the quality of our jobs' duties and makes us enjoy our jobs. According to recent surveys, working prolonged hours can hardly get the best of people. Working five days requires us to work eight hours daily while working for only three days to stay at least thirteen hours working. Thus, we are likely to run out of energy and loss focus to achieve our tasks flawlessly. Take my cousin Adam's experience of being an intern in a pharmaceutical firm as a vivid example. He worked from 8 am to 10 pm, revising patients' prescriptions, doses, and possible drug interactions. Ambitious as he was, he still messed up significant data like patients' age and weight due to lack of sleep and energy by the end of the day. Those repeated mistakes put tremendous stress on him that made her hate her job. Had Adam never worked those long hours, he would have accomplished his tasks more effectively and enjoyed his work.
Secondly, people who work daily have more chances to get promoted, which makes us enjoy their careers. Frankly, it is not soundly reasonable to get a managerial position when you work only three days a week.
For instance, a long time ago, I accepted a full-time job in a chain pharmacy; my shift was only three days a week for twelve hours. After five years of technical work, I still take my original salary at the same rank as a freshly graduate pharmacist. I was disappointed regarding my career advancement. Later, I realized that I did not get any promotion because I was working only three days. So, I immediately switched to the daily working pattern, which gave me the chance to get closer to managers and learn managerial skills. Therefore, by the end of the year, I became the manager of the pharmacy. As you can see, working in an everyday style benefited my career progression and self-enjoyment.
In conclusion, based on the two reasons mentioned above, daily working for a short time is more enjoyable than working only for three days for long hours. Not only because we complete our tasks more efficiently but also get promoted and progress in our careers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, frankly, honestly, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, while, at least, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76401869159 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69872152487 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551401869159 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.8604956239 48.9658058833 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.652173913 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6086956522 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21739130435 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404942501681 0.236089414692 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115233092618 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108713524991 0.0737576698707 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255929564545 0.150856017488 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492482732715 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.