Nowadays technology has improved our lives in different ways. Some of those innovations are causing some problems in children education because they spend time much time in something that disturbs them. Here are my reasons to support my point of view.
First of all, there are a lot of good things on the internet that is not allowed for children because they became to be addicted to this. Some children do not know how many time they can spend at the computer and because of this, they exchange the time that they should be studding to do things on the computer, for example using social media. I have a daughter, Maria Clara, she is 8 years and she was used to be a good student and since I have bought a computer for her she became a worse student. at the begin, I did not realize this and when I received her grade at school I stayed worried. After this, I talked about how was her studies and she told me that it was difficult to concentrate on what she was studing because she could not stop to think about her social media. I become happy about this because she was a true person and we together decided to take it back to her computer. In addition to this, I did the same with her cellphone. As soon as her vocation started brought to her all her devices.
Second, I notice that some students are using those devices for a long time before sleep. This is can be not good for their compromise with the studies Furthermore courses this lead to some health problems. Because of a lot of the programs, today are user-friendly is very easy for any children spend a lot of time from their night to play online games instead to rest. This can cause problems because the students would wake up without had a good night of sleep and they will not pay attention at the school. I have a friend and this happened with his son Felipe. He is only years and since he has won his computer every night he spent gambling on the internet. He woke up every day very tired and his father realized this when his professor called to him and said that Felipe have been struggling with a lot of subjects, specially with the first class, in addition to this he had a lot of headaches. My friend, Felipe’s father, realized that his night of sleep was the problem because he could not pay attention and he did not learn in the classroom. As a result, he banned the use of computers and cell phones after 8 PM. Felipe get back to be a good student and his pains also stopped.
In a quick review, we can realize that these new technologies need to be very restricted because they can lead to a lot of problems with childhood education. They need to concentrate on the time to study and to have a good night of sleep.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'many times'.
Suggestion: many times
... to this. Some children do not know how many time they can spend at the computer and beca...
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Line 3, column 404, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to being'.
Suggestion: used to being
...Maria Clara, she is 8 years and she was used to be a good student and since I have bought ...
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Line 3, column 501, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: At
...ter for her she became a worse student. at the begin, I did not realize this and w...
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Line 3, column 504, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... for her she became a worse student. at the begin, I did not realize this and when I rece...
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Line 3, column 949, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...his, I did the same with her cellphone. As soon as her vocation started brought to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, second, so, for example, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2206.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.35968379447 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36334882648 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440711462451 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6320045528 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9130434783 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04347826087 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146848075119 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462347955835 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0498459418566 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0983008647815 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214832837074 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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