Nowadays, to be a good employee we need to have a good relationship with the team and to achieve this it's very important that we need to learn to have the ability to relate well with them. There are my reasons to support my opinion.
First of all, it’s hard to find a job when you will work alone, normally the modern offices don’t have walls to separate the employs and they work all together in a big room. This reality asks us for good communication and socialization. In addition, the new generation of the company doesn’t work with personal goals anymore but with the sector goals when a group of people will work together and one will help the others disability and because of this is extremely important learning to work well with others. When I started to work in my father’s company, he put me in the products development department, I needed to know about some geographic topics to help the team to create something for each part of my country. I never went further in that in my school but I always was a good friend and it was very easy to talk with others. Because of this, despite my geographic skills was bad, there were others people on my team that knew about this and we worked very well together because the communication flowed easily and one helped the other.
Second, sometimes we need to solve a problem at the work that we don’t know how to proceed. The best way to approach this is by talking to our colleague or with our supervisors. This is very difficult to someone ashamed, on the other hand for a person with the skill to have a good relationship with others, he can do this easily, although he has a lack knowledge about something he can ask a friend to help or to teach him. I have a friend, Caio, and we have been friends since I was ten years and he is very communicative and helpful as well. He told me when he needed to do something that he doesn’t know, because of everyone like him, is always pop up a person to help Caio, and they teach him. Furthermore, when some of his friends have any problem, he helps them as well.
Thus, it is fair to conclude that to have success in a future job, we need to have the sense of work with a team when everyone works together with the same target and one support the other and we can learn something with the teammate. To achieve this is extremely import relate well with others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...ill work together and one will help the others disability and because of this is extre...
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Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'products'' or 'product's'?
Suggestion: products'; product's
...father's company, he put me in the products development department, I needed to kno...
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Line 3, column 790, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[5]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
...went further in that in my school but I always was a good friend and it was very easy to t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, thus, well, in addition, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43764172336 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54231520496 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444444444444 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.7581610543 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.3125 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5625 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123204932214 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515686493502 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039069544179 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101750811609 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0406825513825 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.77 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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