TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, using technological tools such as cellphones, laptops and smart gadgets are become more popular among students and youths. So, as every new phenomenon, these tools has their own advantages and disadvantages. In the case of education, some people believe that students are distracted by such gadgets while others claim that these tools are enable students to broaden their knowledge by accessing to valuable resources of sciences. Personally, my perspective is closer to supporter of these gadgets and social media.
In the first place, technology enable students to access a wide variety of websites and channels in social media in order to aware about the latest events happening in the world. Students usually use search engines such as Google to find extra materials related to their courses. For instance, some of my students solved their math problems with novel methods which were unfamiliar to me. When I asked them where you find these methods, they answered that they find it from some scientific websites. So, if these students were in the past, they definitely had followed the routine method that described by their book and they did not spend time on internet and tried to find a different solution, like a real researcher.
In the second place, by playing games in cell phones, students are enable to learn and get information about their courses. This advantage, which is called Gamification, is a very popular and effective method of learning and educating among children and even adults. For example, students can install some applications like Doulingo on their cell phone and start to learn different languages (e.g. French). While they are playing, they review and apply what they've learned about the vocabularies, phrases and conversations in a real life setting. Hence, new technologies provide us many new ways to improve our educational system's performance.
Finally, students can use materials of online tutors as well as school teachers in order to have better understanding about the courses. We all know that although everything is written in books, but understanding concepts isn't a thing that simply done by just reading, otherwise, we need some people to explain them for us. Students can go online and register in some online classes like Coursera and watch to their videos which taught by very famous teachers. So, they can fix their problems and cover weak points by online classes.
In conclusion, I think that the ways of using these tools are more important than just emphasizing on their disadvantages. We should consider that everything have a dark side too and these gadgets can act like a double-edge sword which can make our children prosper or miserable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'enabled'.
Suggestion: enabled
...ying games in cell phones, students are enable to learn and get information about thei...
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Line 5, column 457, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they've
...are playing, they review and apply what theyve learned about the vocabularies, phrases...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 223, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...en in books, but understanding concepts isnt a thing that simply done by just readin...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, e.g., finally, first, hence, if, second, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2280.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18181818182 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72332669073 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547727272727 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7184233487 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.7 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115227021651 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373979173904 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0288362084166 0.0737576698707 39% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0634269204581 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252315813717 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.