Undoubtedly, the technology has intertwined in our living styles to a degree that raised concerns regarding its influence on young individuals. In this vein, one controversial issue is whether the technology made it harder for teachers to teach students or not. Personally, I believe that not only technology has not affected the learning productivity of students, but also it positively contributed to the efficiency of their learning and the following are the reasons to substantiate my view.
To begin with, schools and teachers have greatly taken advantage of this technological revolution by introducing online tutoring and testing sessions and adapt it in a way that students could learn more effectively. Nowadays, most schools incorporated online and virtual classes that students could participate in even if they cannot physically attend classes, due to sickness or other situations hindering them to be present in class. This is a unique opportunity that allows students following their school schedules seamlessly without interruption. My personal example elaborates on this point. Two years ago, when I was in high school, I got the flu and that did not allow me to be in school for almost two entire weeks. I was really worried that I would lag behind other students and would fail my final exams but thanks to the online course application that our school had developed that time, I was able to catch up with other students and virtually be in classes with them. This clearly shows that the technology has removed some of the traditional barriers in the way of learning.
Furthermore, having access to mobiles and socializing with friends via social networks, offers a unique opportunity for students to be in touch with their friends and discuss their problems regarding school courses. Besides, sometimes a teacher might ask students to create groups in social media so that he can assign projects to groups and students could be able to work on their projects even when they are not in school. Again, my personal example drives this notion home. As I was sick and I could not attend school for a short period, a group was created by one of my friends and I was added to it so we could work on a project that our calculus teacher assigned to us. Within the group, we constantly argued and discussed the project and sometimes we post funny things just to shake off our frustrations. Finally, we were able to hand in our project completely and scored the top in our class. Had our social group not been existed, we could have not been able to submit our assignment on time as some members, including me, could not attend group sessions physically.
To sum up, given all the points and examples mentioned above, I believe that the technology has made it easier for teachers to instruct students, this is because not only they can provide online tutoring sessions using the internet and communication devices but also students have the chance to be more engaged with their course projects via social groups they create with their friends.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1034, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, furthermore, if, really, regarding, so, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2551.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.982421875 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73860094759 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484375 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.684666648 48.9658058833 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.722222222 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4444444444 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100461341823 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0313330474668 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330670225371 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0656212071077 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334697644841 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 10.002688172 165% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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