Education described as an important period in a child's development. Children should learn basic things such as communication, responsibility and other foundation in order to make their own life individually and social life commonly. Some people believe children spending time much time on cell phone, online games and social networking make in harder than past of educating children, others would disagree. In my perspective, I disagree with statement to two key reasons.
First, compared to the past, nowadays the cell phone is enabled to create a good positive effect on children’s study. Thanks to several of advanced software on the cell phone, student fined it not difficult to grasp the most scientific leaning methods. Logically, it’s easier for parents to present beneficial stuff through cell phone for their children instead of having argue with them to let give away those media. For example, I have a nephew. Her name is Tara and she is six years old. Sometimes Tara spends her weekend in our house. My sister tries to learn Tara new things such as color combination or problem solving indirect via let Tara play instructive games in cell phone. When I speak to her, I wonder she is so clever. She always says the amazing things she learned which are not common among children who raised up several years ago. From this fact, we can learn that the cell phone makes educating children much easier and comprehensive than before.
Second, contract to the past, today social networking can expend children’s horizon, which is also beneficial for their education. Various information filling in the web provides children with more broaden world without stepping outside. For example, ten years ago, with limited technology, only through travel can children learn different cultures and languages. However, it spent cost more money and more time; what’s more, children were too young to go for a trip by themselves. So it was not easy to come true. But today, children just need to sit in front of the computer and type some key words through Google, and then they can get plenty of information as they want immediately. In addition, Children can learn other countries’ culture and languages by watching the videos online. Consequently, we can realize that social network Web site is a useful way to educate children.
In a nutshell, I strongly disagree with the statement. With the advanced technology like cell phone, online games, and social networking web site it can facilitate children’s education and help them be successful easier more easily in their future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'keywords'?
Suggestion: keywords
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Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: Website
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Message: Did you mean 'website'?
Suggestion: website
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, then, for example, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 423.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18203309693 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80139150719 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58865248227 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.8456860088 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3333333333 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328608552842 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887744439737 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742165893607 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223163094572 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536870432113 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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