TPO 36 Independent For the successful development of a country it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children five to ten years old than to spend money on universities

A good government must look to the great future of a country and make financial decisions based on the future trends and meet the citizens’ requirements. Education has played and will play a very important role for a successful society. A successful education system not only emphasize on the fundamental education, but also put a lot of effort in higher level education. That is to say it is very important for government to invest in both, secondary and university education.

Firstly, children from 5 to 10, who are the future of a country, rightly expect to have their basic educational needs met. In this period, their brain cognitions need to be developed, their foundation of various subjects need to be built, their desires or interests in some areas need to be stimulated. If we don't have a well-developed education system to support all these, children's growth no matter in intelligent level or in social level, could be limited. Therefore, we must put more investments in the basic education, especially introduce more advanced technology, multi-functional equipment or teaching methods, cultivate well-rounded educators, raise the wage for teachers. All these would be definitely beneficial to the young and future generations.

Secondly, young adults are the present of a country, who should have the freedom and access to get the most advanced education. However, education resource is not always equal for all students, plus, many countries in the world cannot provide a high level truly education. Some western countries, like US, Britain, have many top universities in the world where so many talents flourishing and made differences not only to their countries but also to the world. Therefore, it is unassailable for a government to invest and provide more advanced college education for adults. Moreover, because many students cannot afford the tuition, they really need government’s support as well.

To conclude, no matter it is fundamental education or college education, they are both invaluable and essential for children, adults and the future of a country. Government should invest a lot of money in both areas to keep up with the society’s needs.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs met" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'met' or 'to be met'.
Suggestion: met; to be met
...t to have their basic educational needs met. In this period, their brain cognitions...
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Line 3, column 310, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...some areas need to be stimulated. If we dont have a well-developed education system ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, as to, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27507163324 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05807317791 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535816618911 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8472569817 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0625 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8125 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222226248594 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080359725846 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0646317469755 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141095040784 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457224248441 0.0645574589148 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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