TPO 36-Independent- For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Today, in almost every country, education as a very important concern. In my view, it is far better for governments to spend money on education of very young children. I have two crucial reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, it is established beyond doubt that the best time for finding interests and abilities of every individual is in childhood period. When you find your interest in the elementary school you can flourish it in the future. Conversely, when you find you choose an incorrect major in the university, that will be so late for change. For instance, last week I read an article in a popular magazine of education. This paper was saying about 40 percent of students in my country, are unsatisfied by their majors in their university. It also added, 20 percent of them change their major in the university after one or two year. So that means students wasted their money and the government moneys in these one or two years of study. Had government allocated more money for finding children's talents in the first levels of education, more students would have been interested on their majors in the university.
Secondly, schools need more money because they cannot earn money individually. Almost every university has some ways for earning money. Instead of tuition of students, they have some facilities for earning cash. My university is a compelling example of this. My university rent their gym, conference hall, cinema, and pool to the individual companies, in the specific days of year such as summer vacations. Also my university has a basketball team that every year earn so much money in my country competitions. Conversely, beside gevernment's budget, my highschool in my home town did nod have other income. For money problem, I remember that in some parts of year we would not be able to use our pool in the school. Because the bills was so high and school was not able to pay them.
In sum, I strongly believe that for a better and more succesful future, governments should spend more money on education of very young children. I think so because students can find their interests sooner, and also because schools have more money difficulties.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, if, second, secondly, so, for instance, i think, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.904 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70669950719 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509333333333 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0042610799 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5909090909 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0454545455 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298791405606 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0980905705473 0.076458572812 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112308589682 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232252535848 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0847024234153 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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