TPO 26 independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific reasons and examples to support you
Job is an important part of our lives. In my view it is far better for children to choose jobs different from their parents. I think so for two main reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, it is established beyond doubt that different persons have different talents and interests. So many factors have effect on one person's abilities and interests. Factors like education, place of living, level of intelligence, and friends. So it can be different from every body's parents. My family experience is a compelling example of this. My father grew up in an small rural area, his father died when my father had five years old, and he finished only five grades in the elementary school. As a result he had limited job choices, and he became worker. In contrast, my father migrated to a big city so I grew up in a mega city, our economic situation was not bad and I graduated from a good university in my country. So do you think I should choose my fathers job as my occupation? Finally, I started my work as a project manager in a big road construction company because my situation was different from my father.
Second, world is changing at a high speed, so some jobs will emerge and some will obsolete. When your father's job has no work ability or almost a little work ability, you have to choose a different job as your occupation. My friend, Ebrahem, is a good example of this. His father was mine worker. But at his last years of work, working in mines became obsolete because now machines and robots do this dangerous work. Therefore, Ebrahem was not able to choose a similar job to his fathers', because working in mines became illegal for human in my country had only machines can do that. As a result he is driver of Snap taxi in our city. Snap taxi is a new service and is under the web. This service is a new service in my country and created so many job opportunities for young people.
In sum, I strongly believe that children should not continue their parent's job. I think so because they are different from their parents and because by passing time so many new jobs will emerge and so many will diminish.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... country had only machines can do that. As a result he is driver of Snap taxi in o...
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... job opportunities for young people. In sum, I strongly believe that children...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, i think, in contrast, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51662404092 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53245235517 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483375959079 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 569.7 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.6760363182 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.5833333333 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2916666667 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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