TPO 25 independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Community is a crucial part of our lives. In my view juveniles, today do not give enough time to help their communities. I think so for two main reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, it is established beyond doubt that juveniles nowadays have to spend a lot of time on education. In the past, many people did not study in universities or, also, high schools. Conversely, these days almost every young people have to study to become qualified for getting a job. Therefore they have a few time for helping their communities. My own experience is a compelling example of this. From my childhood until my juvenile I studied in different schools and universities to reach a good job. After that, when my juvenile time was finished, I started my job in a road constructing company. So I did not have time to think about helping my society. In contrast, my father studied only five grades in elementary school and after that, he immediately started working in an environmental company in our city. They helped my city to revive some green areas, and they reduced the pollution that was emitted to the air by companies, with helping them to renew their technology.
Second, juveniles today spend most of their time to do some fun works. These days, almost all young people in my country plan their free times and vacations for traveling or going to the parties. For instance, in the summers, I always went to a new area with beautiful natural landscapes in my country. I was a nature lover and by progressing in transportation and facility services like hotels, I was able to pursue my interests. On the contrary, my father never was able to go long vacations because that was so expensive for his parents, even though he, also, was a lover of nature. Consequently, he spent all of his free time helping his grandparents to do their daily tasks. His grandfather was unable to walk and my father help him by helping him to walk. Also, my father helped other old peoples in our neighboring. He was so kind and he had free time. So he was able to help his nearby community, but I spent my free time in a different way.
In sum, I strongly believe that youngsters today give less help to their communities than youngsters did in the past. I think so because juveniles have to spend a lot of time on education and because they spend their leisure time doing fun works.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...or getting a job. Therefore they have a few time for helping their communities. My own e...
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...ping them to renew their technology. Second, juveniles today spend most of th...
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...y interests. On the contrary, my father never was able to go long vacations because that ...
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...rby community, but I spent my free time in a different way. In sum, I strongly believe tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, first, if, second, so, therefore, for instance, i think, in contrast, in my view, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1975.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62529274005 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70531440672 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489461358314 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.8139282472 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.08 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181973463375 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638414499627 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580937072546 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139830025844 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415106414728 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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