TPO 24 independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our work play a pivotal role in our future. In my view it is a good idea that parents encourage their teenagers to take a part-time job to prepare them for future. I think so for two main reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, it is established beyond doubt that part-time job is a good way for gaining experience. In a part-time job pressure on the juveniles are not high. So they can make some mistakes and gain experience from their mistakes and their coworkers. So this experiences will be so fruitful for their future. My own experience is compelling example of this. When I was youngster, in the evenings, my father went me to his work place. Over there I had a small job and I helped my father in his works. Even though my today job is not related to my first part-time job with my father--today I am a civil engineer but I worked as an apprentice of carpet making with my father-- I learned so many thing in that part-time job that are so workable in my today job. For instance, I learned responsibility, patient and respect to my coworkers in my part-time job.
Second, in the part-time jobs young people can create some good relationships. By having good relations almost every people will be able to progress in his future occupation. For example, when I was a newcomer in my undergraduate university, I started a part-time job in a restaurant. In this work my salary was so low, but I became friend with one of the most important persons in my life (Peyman). Peyman was brother of restaurant's manager. He has a big company of road construction. When I visited him, he advised me a lot about how I can become successful in my major. After I finished my studies in the university, I was a strong engineer because of Peyman's advises. Consequently, I became accepted in many interviews of big road construction companies and I started my job in one them. Thanks to my good relationship with Peyman, today, I am a project manager in a big road constructing project in my country.
In sum, I strongly believe that parents should encourage their children to have a part-time job. It is so beneficial for juvenile's future because they gain some good experiences and create some good relationships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, second, so, for example, for instance, i think, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1846.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62656641604 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95004822507 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47619047619 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0450143906 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.9166666667 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.625 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214115571573 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731438385205 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756255988922 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160372255091 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524279482768 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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