With the development of technology, people have become more dependent on modern products such as cell phones, internet, television and so on. Some argue that the evolution of technology has been affected negatively on children's education as children become more dependent on technology. While others hold the different idea that these tools have increased the study efficiency. As from my perspective, the former view carries more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
Primarily, cell phones and social networking could seriously distract students from their education. These tools are fascinating for them, and they get diverted from their goal. To illustrates this, when I was in high school, many students around used to play video games during the class discussion. As a student, they were supposed to pay attention in a class instead of cell phones draw much of their attention. Consequently, they lost their precious time of acquiring knowledge so, they could not perform well in the exam. Thus, it is very hard for the teachers to educate them though these teachers work very hard in the class.
Furthermore, nowadays parents have become liberal towards their children and give them all freedom in their lives compared to the past days. Children are provided with cell phones and laptop from an early age. Additionally, children do not know to control their excitement, and they spend more time on a cellphone and playing video games. Consequently, children get diverted from their education which is crucial at this age. From a survey from the University of Chicago, children usually spend around 40% of their time on cell phones and on social media. Gradually teenagers may be addicted to these tools. It might be affected their concentration because they keep on thinking about the video games and social website whenever they try to study and thereby, they would get a low score in the exams.
Finally, on the contrary, these modern tools facilitate children in their education by providing them huge study sources from the internet. Children can Find extra information related to their education by surfing on the internet. However, many students try to use that source in the wrong way. My own friend is a compelling example of this. He used to look for the answers in order to finish his homework earlier, which also makes difficult for the teachers to score them on the bases of their performance in the class. Thus, even though there are many positive impacts of modern technology, it has affected more negatively on children's education.
To sum up, I strongly believe that it is very difficult for parents and teachers to educate the children compared to the past. This is because, children are provided all the facilities from their childhood, and because of that, they strongly get addicted to these tools which would impact negatively on their education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...en become more dependent on technology. While others hold the different idea that the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, such as, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10062893082 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64415527536 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486373165618 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5834664793 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5769230769 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3461538462 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76923076923 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20148553803 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609422148437 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457314746215 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12004360703 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040715573458 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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