TPO-35 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, If you ask young people whether they like to be a famous figure or not I am sure most of them will be say that they are eager to be in that situation. on the other hand, we can find some people who do not like this kind of life and they have their reasons, one of which was the fact that celebrities do not have privacy in their lives. Personally, I concur with this reality that these people need more privacy, and I have two reasons, which will be mentioned in the following essay.
To begin with, humankind these days are struggling with their job, what ever it is. so they need calm and relax weekend to regain their energy for the next week. But do famous people a have chance to be in a calm environment? Whereever they go, they will be surounding by people who want to take a photo. Most of the times they can not deny them because each well-known person have responsibility for they lovers. I have a personal experience which is compelling evidence for this argument. I have a cousin, he is a professional football player. One they we decided to go to an adventure journey and see most of our country's cities in a month. Since the begining of our trip, I always see nomerous individuals around asking to see my cousin. At first, it was interensing for me but after only few days, I began to hate this situation. At the end of this trip, I recognized that celebrities need more privacy from what they have now.
Secondly, everybody can wear clothes as they like and choose what is more convinient, but it is not the same for famous people. Not only thay can not put on what ever they want but also they have to follow some rules if they have sponser. As I mentioned befor, we was in a trip with my professional football player cousin. I remember some times I put on a simple Tshirt with a casual pants but he had to wear what his sponser said. Some times he complained about his life, he told me besides his obligation to that specific clothes compony, he is not be able to put on a shirt if it was a little bit dirty because if he did it, people would take a lots of photos from him and it could be the top news of most of the channels next day. after imagining this kind of situation for one minute, I reach to the conclusion that being famous is not good at all if you have not privacy in your life to wera whatever you want.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementined argument in my opinion famous figures need more privacy to have convinient life as regular people have and in this condition being celebrity is not my choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...they are eager to be in that situation. on the other hand, we can find some people...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...hat specific clothes compony, he is not be able to put on a shirt if it was a litt...
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Line 3, column 589, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...t be able to put on a shirt if it was a little bit dirty because if he did it, people woul...
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Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a lot' or simply 'lots'?
Suggestion: a lot; lots
...because if he did it, people would take a lots of photos from him and it could be the ...
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Line 3, column 735, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: After
... news of most of the channels next day. after imagining this kind of situation for on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, well, kind of, in my opinion, to begin with, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.28806584362 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41865754433 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460905349794 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 670.5 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4505527791 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2380952381 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.14285714286 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.080678482889 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0287247168489 0.076458572812 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0322440509249 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.057313023717 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341966535607 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.9 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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