Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, each society has it's own rules to manipulate the people's behaviour, constitutions were made because of this matter in each country. There is a controversial question about the severity of nowadays' rules in comparision to the past periods, wheter the rules become stricted about young people or not? Personally, I believe they are not as firm as they were in the past. I have two evidence for my view point, both of which will be mentioned in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, in the past there were be more limitted for people, for instance, I am going to talk about students' condition . Pupils were not allowed to bring some devices as moblie phones to the school, it desturbing the teacher and other students' attention. However, these days, not only do students bring them into the school but also they use them during the classroom while teacher are talking about particular subject. To illustrate it I will compare my classroom with my 8-year-old cousin's one. When I was student we had a lot of Prohibitions in the school, one of which was bringing mobiles to the class. In addition, if our totur saw the phone he had the right to break it. On the other side, my little cousin, these days, brings his either mobile or tablet to the classroom, using it whenever he wants, and nobody can punish him because of that. So few disipline manner are used these days for young people than in the past.
Secondly, if we want to talk about strict the first think that juts out of our minds is militery service, which is mandatory in many countries as mine. In past, militery service and being a soldier was one of the most frightned things in any boys life, since they were faced with so much hard works and dicipline in that period of time. but it is not like as it was in these days, now militery service is something like school years. let us compare the past circumestance with current one. In past soldiers were commited to wake up at 4 am, while these days they hardly wake up at 7am. In past they could not take a break unless they become hardly ill, However, nowadays they have weekend and they are be able to see their family and friends every week. In this situation, militery service is not nightmare for juveniles, on the contrary, It is adventure activity which helps them to have fun times.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments we can conclude that these days we see little strict against young people which can be infer easily from these days school rules and militery's enviroment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, in addition, talking about, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64238410596 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46073889037 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53642384106 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3490903988 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.15 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.65 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0967451021894 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.030601163242 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035389942989 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0706360430868 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041413076514 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.