The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Everybody in his life confronts with different points of view and heards various opinions while he is watching Tv or reading newspaper, Most of which are cited from famous figure as a athletes or other celebrities. There is controversy about the fact that whether these citations affect on younger people in compare to elders or not? Some people hold an opinion that these have more effects on youths, while others refute their viewpoints. Personally, I concur first opinion because of two reason, both of whice are mentioned in following praragraphs.
First, as we all may experience it in our lives, young people in lower ages are always seeking for a person to follow him in life. some of them choose a football player and try to imitate his life style. In addition, they listen carefully to heard what they say about any aspect of life for example, about politics or about other subjects. I will mention my personal experience which is compelling evidence for my opinion. When I was a child, I always used to follow rivaldo, brazilian football player. My job was to heard each interview of him or read his lifestory and try to put his actions in my personal life, even I elleminate some foods from my diet because of his speech. to some up briefly, juveniers are more influenced by celebrities since they are seeking for an hero in their life especially during the teens.
Secondly, when human grow up and experience different situations in his life, there is no need to follow another persons opinion, so it is not really interensing for them that what is specific celebrity's opinion. for instance, there is a show in my country that interview famous figures and ask their opinion about particular topic and me and my cousin are eager to see it. However my grandfather hate this program, so when we all are in a same room watching TV he turn the Tv chanell when they show this program and make us angry. It is all because he thinks he know about that matter far better than that person.
To make long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments we can conclude that famous people's opinions are far more important for teenagers and young people rather than elder ones, in fact, our grand fathers not only are not interested in their speechs but also they hate to hear them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71571072319 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53754342275 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551122194514 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.2917969679 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.1875 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187933824164 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617854640481 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500398953045 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132895092444 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564160682397 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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