TPO- 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout of history, we see many great painters,music composers, and other artists in different field of the art. But thesedays the society mostly focuse on the other aspects like the sports. There is controversial question due to whether government should spend the budget on the sports or on the art? Personally, I believe it is crucial to devote the governments' money on art because of two major reasons, both of which are mentioned in the following essay.
To begin with, there are countless big companies like Qatar airways or Betwin which support sport teams. For instance, you may see bay now there are various companies' name on the football clubs T-shirt. thereby, it is crystaly clear that these sport teams have sponsers who support them. However, This is not the same in art field. Not only do not have any sponser, but also artists must pay a considerable money to rent a place for their gallary. I have a cousin who is a great painter. although he has won a lot of national and international competitions, nobody help him to establish his own class to teach young people interested in the painting and he has no choice except work as a taxi driver to pay his bills. In my opinion, it is governments duty to help these kind of artists to not face with problem, so it leads them to focus on their job as a teacher to foster other great artist in our future generation.
Secondly, while most of the people in past were interested in the art, these days we see limited individuals who are eager to watch the arts. It is only because they have not seen any art program on Tv and the only thing they watch is football matches. Thus, governments ought to help the artists to have significant programs both in Tv and throughout the country in a gallary shape. The artsits must be protected as they were in past. We know lots of artist from ancient time but is there any famous sport man from those times? In illustrates the fact that in past empires encourage artists to build prominent objects. My cousin who I mentioned before always complains the situation. He and his friends went to the the organization that conduct the Tv channels to establish a channel by which spread the art across the country. But the organization did not help them. On the other hand, we see everyday lots of news about the money which alloted to enhance the sport stadiums.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments in my point of view it is important and vital to help artist since they are an importante element of each society. So the budget must be spended on the art more than now.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for instance, kind of, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59656652361 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59135077189 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525751072961 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3220003875 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.25 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4166666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122407956179 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0344064122652 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420738788762 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078414211588 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325028453252 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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