TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
In the contemporary era with the advent of technology, mankind faces a complex life. Every day, we faced with new issues and emerging new technology, so it is crucial to have the ability to be adapted to these changes as soon as possible which made us have the ability to adjust ourselves with the new situations and make a plan. I think this is more important in young individuals since they have many years in front of them. I have two reasons for my viewpoint, both of which are mentioned below paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind immediately pondering this issue is the fact that nowadays we face different problems every day, therefore, it is important to find the best solution to eliminate that barrier from our way then keep moving forward. There is noting crucial than having the ability to organize with an utter plan for young people if they want to be successful people in their life. There was a survey in my country, publishing in the Times newspaper, about the importance of attaining an ability to make a plan. They studied two separate groups, one of them was economics who do not have the ability to make a sufficient plan in hard situations, on the other hand, there was a group of individuals without any academic degrees but gifted ones that can make great plans. the scholars asked them to find the best solution in a catastrophic financial situation and the second group's performance was much better than the fist one. So we can understand the value of this ability in a modern complex society which puts new hardel in front of us every single day.
Secondly, because of the changes we see every day in our life, we can not maintain our business if we can not change our plan and organize a new one. In fact, these days the important element in any successful firm is to adjust itself with changes. for instance, after the day that Mr.jobs shown iPhone to the universe other companies must have the ability to change their platform to touch screen mobiles if they wanted to compete with rivals in the complex areas of mobile phones. In addition, In my opinion, one of the most considerable reasons that Nokia could not maintain its first rank among other brads was the fact that it did not have the ability to make a new plan to challenge with others companies in such an innovative phenomenon like touch screen mobile phone and smart ones after that.
To make the long story short, according to the aforementioned argument I strongly believe in the current era it is crucial to gain the ability to make plans and adjust ourselves with new changes in these days complex situations that we face with new thinks every day. and the speed of these changes is going to increase day by day.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: The
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Suggestion: For
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Suggestion: And
...that we face with new thinks every day. and the speed of these changes is going to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, i think, in addition, in fact, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2245.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60985626283 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47014991494 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47022587269 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 722.7 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.0588720134 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.3125 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4375 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193699470255 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074464213843 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639705785849 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131049262757 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398314900338 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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