TPO 36 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a doubt, it is very difficult to choose where the government will use their funds for good education of citizens. Some people believe that it is better that the government allocate their budget on young kids education than funding college universities. In my humble opinion, I believe that to be a successful country, government must use their money on universities. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, building a strong nations begins with good quality of education. Everyone in the community would benefit if all of its citizen has learned a college degree. Creating many graduates will help the economy acquire more income and generate funds. Thus, working citizens help the government become more stable and developed country whereas if the funds are allocated to young children they can study for their elementary years but cannot afford to go to college. So I think it is more useful for the funds to go with university. For instance, our mayor build three city college within my hometown and it helped the youth to finished their college degree. Today, college education is very expensive and not all Filipinos can afford to pay for their tuition fee, so in this way many students will get a chance to finish their studies and can secure a good career. Also, those students who were scholars from the government are required to work with the government for three years that way they can lend their services to the community and help the country to grow as a nation.
Secondly, employment rate is very important in a country. This is the measure of how the government can compete with other countries. If their employment rate is low then they cannot encourage investors to build business and establishment in the country. In other words, college education is vital in every country. For example, lets say the government does not fund the college or university then they will not have future CEO or president of a company. College education is the key to the betterment of the economy of one's country because they will be future of the society. My cousin Mark, after graduation work in a big company in Makati. He is a very brilliant and talented sales agent and has many ideas how to gain profit with their company. After 5 years he becomes promoted and helped their company be on top of business in the Philippines.
To summarize, I believe it is more beneficial that funding should go to college institutions rather than the education of young children. This is because college graduates help the government gain more profit through high employment rates. Also brilliant and talent people always have a good education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 33, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'nation'?
Suggestion: nation
...say. First of all, building a strong nations begins with good quality of education. ...
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Line 5, column 521, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...key to the betterment of the economy of ones country because they will be future of ...
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Line 7, column 241, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e profit through high employment rates. Also brilliant and talent people always have...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2247.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8847826087 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61176902293 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471739130435 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2571165368 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.625 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211875187224 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654322421702 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457497048129 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139577234046 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0349914240655 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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