TPO 39 - Independent taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the contemporary world, with the galloping rate, at which science and technology are flourishing, there are many more job opportunities created. However, finding a career leading to a secure, successful future still is the main concern of the young generation. Answering the question of whether it is easier to find a job leading to a bright future rather than the past can provoke imminent controversies owing to a variety of factors contributing to the formation of a viewpoint involving careful analysis. A number of people are in the conviction that since there were less educated people in the past, finding a good job and being successful was not as competitive as it is today; therefore, people could have identified jobs leading to a successful future easier. Their supposition is at odds with some others' from another camp embracing the view that due to many factors, people can easily become successful no matter what their career is; in fact, from my vantage point, the latter carries more weight. reasons directing me toward this belief are manifold, but two conspicuous of which are: there are more job opportunities, and the young generation receive more supports, upon which I elaborated the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, one cogent reason is that today, there are more job opportunities than young people seeking for jobs. Indeed, there are more variety of jobs and career available that one can choose to pursue than past. In other words, it is less competitive to pursue our desired career. so, the young generation can easily choose the best way toward success. it can be exemplified by stating the fact that three, four centuries ago, our ancestors were only occupied in agriculture career. but, now, many industries and fields, such as computer science, Aerospace, and so forth exist that one can choose to pursue in the future. Ergo, it can be readily confirmed that since there are more job opportunities, all career are sufficiently profitable, and can lead to a secure future.
The second compelling reason deserving some words here is that parents supported their children both financially and morally more than parents decades ago. they register their children in extra classes and bring about whatever they need to become the best version of themselves. Moreover, being interdependent, all career are as important as each other. With the advent of intermediate occupations, almost no borders are separating different professions and fields. Consequently, all jobs and career can lead to a successful life. For instance, now all the career on computers, which makes computer engineering a highly profitable job. At the same time, computers are made of different electrical and mechanical elements. Hence, all of these fields are considered equally important. Thus, nowadays, people have more chance to become successful in their careers, and all careers are interdependent, which make them all profitable.
All in all, if the above discussion is contemplated, it can be concluded that even though there are more educated people who are seeking to find different jobs, still it is easy to identify an appropriate job leading to a secure future compared to the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...cern of the young generation. Answering the question of whether it is easier to find a job leading to a...
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Suggestion: Reasons
... point, the latter carries more weight. reasons directing me toward this belief are man...
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Suggestion: So
...mpetitive to pursue our desired career. so, the young generation can easily choose...
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Suggestion: It
...ily choose the best way toward success. it can be exemplified by stating the fact ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...re only occupied in agriculture career. but, now, many industries and fields, such ...
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Suggestion: They
... morally more than parents decades ago. they register their children in extra classe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, in fact, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2713.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22736030829 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88275863251 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512524084778 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 858.6 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6825048025 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.956521739 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5652173913 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188892826141 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574387922686 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0437266025938 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115696831223 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499075059928 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.