Tpo 4. Do you agree with the statement that in twenty years will be more cars than there are today
Cars are crucially important in our lives. It is thought by some that cars are causing a lot of problems especially in the climate change. However, others think that cars would exists and their number would get increased. Personally, I believe that cars will increase in twenty years from today. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, contrary to the belief that the number of cars would decrease, evidence shows that the number of vehicles in the last few decates is drastically increased. Roughly, a family of four people has four cars. This is because our population is increasing every year. As aresult, we would have more people on the planet, and more cars which would be needed for use. For instance, statistics have revealed that 91 percent of people all over the world have cars. According to this evidence, it is clear that the number of cars would be increased in the near future.
On top of that, nowadays with the change of our lifestyle, the demand for cars is higher than it was in the past. On the other hand, in the past, the car was just invented and people did not have enough knowledge about it. When people saw that vehicales could make their lives easier and convinient, the production increased in a blink of an eye. My own experience as an adult who posses a car is a compelling example of this. About ten years ago, I bought my own car. I purchased because was a necessity, so that I could go to work, which was 45 minutes away from my house. So, like me there are a lot of people that bought a car for that reason. If I had not been purchesed my car, my life would not have been easy. Overall, I am sure that people would always would look for buying cars all the time in the future because the job opportunities might be fare away from the locations where people live.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the number of cars would be increased in the future. This is because the number of people is getting high every year, according to recent statistics and because cars are vehicals that people would need all the time during their lifetime.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 178, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'exist'
Suggestion: exist
.... However, others think that cars would exists and their number would get increased. P...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52835051546 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38928924649 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497422680412 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7323951347 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8636363636 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186752705074 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0652306272017 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622343489581 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12988702668 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371335446916 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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