TPO-40 - Independent Writing Task Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

There are myriad factors or considerations which take into that whether it is a good idea or bad idea when parents give their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school. As far as I concerned according to the following reasons and from my personal experiences, I am of the conviction that when a parent offer their children money for each high mark they get in school is a good idea because in this way they can appreciate their children and get them to motivate for better performances for next time. Someone can wight the pros and cons of each side. The reason for my conviction will be explored in the following essay.
The first exquisite reason which gives adherence to my viewpoint with an example. When parents give money to their children for excellent mark this can push there children for one extra mile because, in this way, children will know if they work hard on their study this will pay off and get a reward it can be a valuable lesson for future when they work hard for their job they will be getting rewarded for it my experience is an excellent example of this whenever I get good marks in my class back in school days my parents used to give reward me and I work hard every time to get better for good reward like if I want something special toy I wait till my exam result came they then ask to my parent for money I get my toy so think it is a nice way to children get for study.
Apart from the fact mention above, one should consider another sublet point meticulously pertaining to obtain huge experience. The noteworthy refreshing statistic revealed recently conducted social research in my country in which majority of parent agree on the fact by giving some reward to their children can help them to get in competition and focus for study, as a reward money is a way they can get what they want to shed light on this topic according to the research done by Delhi University by giving children money in school day can help them to get manage money because they get it by a lot of hard work they will better know how to use it.
Admittedly, some can justification to another side by saying that giving money children on their school day is not good they don't know how to use it what if they use it for something bad, they can get the bad habit and compare money with the study is not a good knowledge for them and lastly by giving money for high grade for children can change their thinking they will start study only for money not for study but I still affirm that get reward by money for high mark is good for school student.
In summary, by all affirmations above one should consider parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school is a good idea.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...en on their school day is not good they dont know how to use it what if they use it ...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good knowledge'.
Suggestion: good knowledge
...and compare money with the study is not a good knowledge for them and lastly by giving money for...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, lastly, so, still, then, apart from, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39644970414 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32622073401 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.394477317554 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 50.0 20.1344086022 248% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 215.32802883 48.9658058833 440% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 222.9 100.406767564 222% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 50.7 20.6045352989 246% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.427313988208 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.210794040492 0.076458572812 276% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.159487224071 0.0737576698707 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.326824039639 0.150856017488 217% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933179715803 0.0645574589148 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.6 11.7677419355 209% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 37.65 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.4 10.1575268817 201% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 9.13 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.0 10.0537634409 219% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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