Education has become one of the prominent issues in the modern era which has always engendered heated debate among academicians. A question which is raised in this regard is whether parents should use money as an award for students' high grade. While some people believe that this behavior can have undesirable effects on children, the others hold the opposite perspective. I firmly think that the advantages of this method carry more weight than the disadvantages owing to some noticeable reasons. The following paragraphs will elaborate on my points of view.
The most significant reason is that the parents should motivate their children, thus they need to use awards to encourage them. Besides, money can be an excellent prize for children as they can buy whatever they want. This can help student study more effective, as a result, they become more successful. For instance, when I was in the primary school, I did not like to study because I thought It was tedious. My parents talked to my teacher to find a solution. Then, they decided to use money as a motivation for my. on the other hand, I always wanted money to buy the games. It really worked as I realized the more I studied, the more I can buy games. It indicates that money can be helpful for students improvement.
Another considerable reason which deserves some words here is that using money as an award makes the opportunity for students to choose what they want to buy. It makes the children more independent as they can decide for themselves. Also, making decision boosts their self-confidence which would have a beneficial impression on their future career. A recent survey on this topic has been done in Japan. They examine the effects of paying money to children's' grade because they are so conservative in their education system. It turns out that this will help students learn how to make a decision. Consequently, offering money for their grade is helpful.
In brief, while some unfavorable results can be mentioned by criticisms of this plan, I think it would be advantageous. Because this method not only intrigues students make more efforts but also makes them more independent. I recommend that parents exploit money as a prize for their student attempt.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
... a motivation for my. on the other hand, I always wanted money to buy the games. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, if, really, so, then, thus, while, for instance, i think, in brief, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 13.8261648746 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95225464191 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72215233735 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51724137931 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.2977985541 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.7916666667 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7083333333 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25331085954 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791912216594 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586113184511 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16211647161 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414898805048 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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