TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.

News has become one prominent aspect of everyone lives owing to widespread technologies like internet web pages and communication applications. Nowadays, all the events news is available on the internet in the fraction of second, therefore, access to the striking news is dramatically easier than people taught in the past. One significant question which raised here is that whether it is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect our life or not. While some people strongly seek all the news, no matter they are significantly irrelevant to them, others hold the opposite perspective. I firmly think that spending time on useless events happening is just the worst way to waste our time due to some noticeable reasons. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate on my points of view.
The most remarkable reason is that time is as precious as our other properties like money or even more. We should be economical with our time so putting our time on events would not be a wise choice. Therefore, we can utilize our time in the more intelligent ways like reading books or doing exercise which have some benefits for us despite useless events. For example, when I was younger, I spend a lot of time surfing on the internet for knowing about events like the famous people wedding ceremony or their babies which was really absurd. Hence, I did not have enough time for more valuable tasks like studying and sports. Ultimately, I was depressed owing to lack of sufficient time for my daily aims. My father advised me to quite the communication application which just wasted my time so I did it. It was the most significant advice which helped me save my time for more important tasks, not events around the world.
Another notable reason which worths some words here is that attractive news on web pages just want us to pay attention to their advertisements. Besides, we waste our time on unmeaningful events, we would be intrigued to buy staffs which we do not need them. Paying attention to the events is not only time-consuming but also not economical. One recent survey has accomplished on this topic in Yale University to find the correlation between intriguing events and factory advertisement. It indicates that the more interesting the events on the page is, the more people would remember the advertisement on that page so the companies pay the webpages to advertise their products accompany with exciting news like celebrities divorce.
To sum up, taking all the eminent factors into account, we might come to the result that events happening which do not influence our lives is not enough important to waste our time and money. I recommend that everyone should put their time and effort on the goal which is valuable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'events'' or 'event's'?
Suggestion: events'; event's
...ication applications. Nowadays, all the events news is available on the internet in th...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, hence, if, really, second, so, therefore, while, for example, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89830508475 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73777019946 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510593220339 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5266984539 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.095238095 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4761904762 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141931305708 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481877050251 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756986142678 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928836119132 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527244921132 0.0645574589148 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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