TPO 40.
Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
having a child who performs great in school and achieves high grades is the dream of many parents. besides good scores are representative of more intelligent and abilities of a youngster. parents have different ways to help their children to achieve this goal. some parents reward their kids by giving them money for their exceptional score. Although some people may reprimand this approach, I concur with it. In the ensuing lines, I will explain two reasons to substantiate my response.
First, setting goals which bring about precious rewards can act as a good motivation for children to do as well as they can. Not all students are self-motivated, therefore, parents need a logical way to encourage them and rewarding with money is a genius idea. In this way, studying would not be a mundane and useless task and after a while, studying may turn into a pleasurable habit for the children. Needless to say that if parent force kids to do a task, they will negative results so by rewarding them parents do not need to fight with their children and force them to study which can be frustrating. Take my 12-year-old brother as an example, when he was in fourth grade he used to play with his friends and avoiding studying and his scores degraded drastically and my parents did everything but they failed. so poor was his grades that my parents decided to do something different; they promised him if he gets high scores in the final exam, they will buy him a play station with a brand new bicycle that both of them were his favorite things. As a result, he ranked second in his class.
Second, by this approach children learn about the value of money and truth of the real world since young ages. studying is a hard task for many children and that is the reason they avoid it. when children know they earn money in the event that they study hard, they understand how tough is making money which is a precious lesson for their adulthood. besides, they understand that the real world’s rules are the same and if they try enough they deserve to earn money. A comparison between my two nephews can clear this point. they are brothers and one of them is 8 years older. The younger one, James, used to receive a present after each good score; however, the older one, mark, did not this advantage because of his parents' financial problem during his childhood. now they are both grown up, James has started his own business when he was only 18 and work day and night to make money and now he is a successful person, on the other hand, mark is a staff with an average wage and he is used to wasting his money because he did not learn how valuable and hard to earn is money.
In conclusion, according to the aforementioned explanations and examples I agree with the rewarding student with money for high grades because it motivates them to try as hard as they can and they learn how valuable money is and learn about the real world which is useful for their adulthood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2439.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59322033898 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47085141897 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482109227872 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.7904510633 48.9658058833 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.863636364 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1363636364 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30780075862 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920978409504 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521863805958 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198072466497 0.150856017488 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0318593459824 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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