TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

People, nowadays, are more busy than before, so children have lot of time leisure. There is a heated argument whether the kids, in absence of parents, should have fun or do there academic tasks.Children, I believe, should do kill their time by reading, doing homework, or other school related tasks.

To begin with, today's children have to deal with various academic tasks. They take various educational classes along with other optional classes- music class, dance class, sports class. So they are busy very much. As there parents are out, doing these assignments could be optimum utilization of time because they may not have enough time to do these when their will be parents available. Further, since the parents are busy, they may be too tired and cannot take part for doing their children assignment. Therefore, it may prompt to deterioration of children studying and grade.

Furthermore, if children mostly pass their time by playing, hanging around and idling, they can be accustomed to it. This can impact in his study and behavior and it will be hard to get off from such habits. you can take example of our high-school. When I was at grade 8, I had a friend, Jack, whose parents were business man and almost busy. Since he was free most of time, he used to come our houses and also hang with other friends, and gradually it became his habits. Finally he didn't do his assignment, performed bad in exam and he took longer time to ace the exam than his peer, which had a negative impact in his life and career.

Moreover, Studying in free time will have good impact on both parents and children. When the parents come from work, if they see their children reading, they feel happy and seeing their behavior they play with children, encourage in academic performance and provide their needs. On the other hand, if parents come to home and children are else where playing or playing video game or movie, making large sound, then parents can be pestered. They rant children which further cause burden to both parents and child mind.

In conclusion, however,some argue that during free time children should pass time by playing, I don't. This can have vicious effect to children and parents. Therefore, I insist that parents should encourage their children to do academic related task when they are busy.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Children
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Suggestion: Finally,
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Suggestion: didn't
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Suggestion: don't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86868686869 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40207669565 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522727272727 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4995266125 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8095238095 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8571428571 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90476190476 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336320878654 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104133984212 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698476784016 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214322356203 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509811939353 0.0645574589148 79% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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