With the advance of urban cities, people are busier than in the past. they have to work from 8 Am to 5 Pm which means that they spend most of their time in their office and far away from their families especially their children. therefore, they prefer to spend the remains time of their day with their children. in my opinion, I believe that it is best to use that time in doing what is related to the school works. in the following two reason will be rendered:
First and important thing is that it would help the children to learn their lessons better.some studies shows that children learn better with their parents than study lonely. parent wants to spend their free time with their children and children needs someone to teach them what they learn from the school deeply. thus, it would be a great opportunity for both to reach their aim. for instance, I was 8 years old when my parents work out and when I came home I have to spend the remains day alone until they came back. during this time I study my lessons and did my homework until they come back. when they came back, as they thought that I was alone and need to be with them, the try to play with me or took me out like a park. it wasn't good for me because I need their help to solve some problems which I had on my homework but I couldn't tell them until one day I wrote a letter for them and told them that I need your help.after they event they spend their time with me but in a different way they try to learn me in funny ways which not only made me happy but also it helped me learn better.
The second reason what isn't less important than the first one is that parents do their responsible in front of their children too. parents have lots of responsibility in front of their children, they have to take care of them, have attention to them and prepare for them clothes and food. as today parents are too busy they don't have enough time to make them happy and care about them as a future person.hence they have to mix this to in on in order to keep their children happy and profitable for their future.as an example, my uncle was a busy man he and her wife didn't have any free time to spend it with their family. when they found any free times they prefer to play games with their children or took them on the trip. as their children didn't have any person who looks forward to the work they gradually decrease in their education and today as a 24 and 25 years old adult, they can't even find their aims. what they want to be later. and continuously repeat that it's because of our parent's fault if they have more attention to our education than our entertainment we will have a better life than what we are now.
as a conclusion, both reasons quiet shows that how parents play an important role in their children's life. hence as they don't have lots of free time to spend with them, they have to make a plan in order to use this limited time in an efficient way. having fun with children is as necessary as care about their education is.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 112.0 43.0788530466 260% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2426.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 569.0 407.700716846 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.26362038664 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.11176456213 2.67179642975 79% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411247803163 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 726.3 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.7849624026 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.3 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.45 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 46.0 5.5376344086 831% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311104251731 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123037547046 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833571259584 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247989443356 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664539024448 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.72 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.5 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.