The time spent by parents with children should the best, because some people, nowadays, are more focus on things related to work rather than have a meaningful conversation with their families. Although, there are more reasons why some people prefer being busy instead of being with family, parents should consider take them away. However, if a hard worky father would have a little time to spend with his child, I would say that this time would be better seized in playing games or sports together him, since there, the father would have the chance to be updated with his child’s news and both would be out of the fast normal life.
First of all, parents usually have a chat with their children in order to know what they are doing or how they are, increasing their confidence with them, since there, their children will rely more on them and will tell them some things which are the pivotal importance for parents to know how to lead their children for the right side. For example, my mother always play football games with me, and when we are at the middle of the game laughing a lot, she comes up with a question like “Who was this girl you met last night” with that kind of approach my mother has earned my confidence, as a result, I tell her almost everthing that I do.
Second, although it is important that parents play a little bit the role of teachers, they need to know that they have a much more important role which is helping their children to succeed, so school is not the only way to succeed, there are a bunch of ways. For instance, my father once told me that I needed to start seeking what I would like to be in the future; a musician, artist, engineer, or so forth. With those words, I started to look for something I liked and found out my love for the guitar. Now my father plays sometimes the guitar with me which, although he cannot be all the time with me, he makes me feel like we were all the time together.
In conclusion, parents need to consider that if they do not have time to attend their children asks, they need to fill that empty space left in any way. For me, the best way they can fill it is by playing games or sports with their children, because it is necessary to enhance the confidence between both and to lead them on the right path.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...ugh it is important that parents play a little bit the role of teachers, they need to know...
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Line 5, column 245, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bunches'?
Suggestion: bunches
...ot the only way to succeed, there are a bunch of ways. For instance, my father once t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42924528302 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.20175421179 2.67179642975 82% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495283018868 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 20.1344086022 189% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.6915728421 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.727272727 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.5454545455 20.6045352989 187% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3636363636 5.45110844103 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270809055121 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108968845915 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629796257375 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176351437525 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463567904733 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 11.7677419355 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.29 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.01 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.0537634409 171% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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