There is no doubt that people who have developed something beneficial for society must be awarded in any way. There are many prizes which are delivered on a yearly basis for the most innovative people and projects in the world. As far as I am concerned, these people deserve it because they have spent so much time and resources trying to do it possible. I cling to this outlook because of two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, agencies which are the in-charge of giving those awards and prizes can encourage the artists or smart people to come up with more breakthroughs. It is proved that people who are congratulated use this as a boost in what they are doing. For instance, in my school, when I was in 5th grade I was asked to get a science project idea about trees. I had been brainstorming for weeks of how to come up with a new amazing idea. So, when I realized what I needed to do, I got the best project idea in my class, and the teacher made me pass in front of all my school and gave me a monetary prize. Later on, I decided to do the project, what was the result? My project about trees was a great improvement for my school because they could take advantage of it in the granges.
Secondly, when someone is awarded, his job is actually highlighted, so it is indispensable that people who discover something in the field of science or in any field should be given a proof of gladness. Let me take my cousin as an example, he discovered a device which helped farmers to get new kinds of trees. He studied in China, and then he found out that trees were reallocated in order to get a mix of them, for instance, an orange seed was sawed with lemon seed and then both were taken to my cousin’s device, thus obtaining a new seed which could grow up as an orange-lemon tree. For this, my cousin was given a scholarship for going to study his Ph.D. abroad.
To sum up, I strongly believe that excellence should be given great awards in order to get those artists to follow achieving success. Besides, they could be greatly encouraged and motivated with prizes, so, they need to be highlighted in any way.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, look, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for instance, no doubt, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.415 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5574596771 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2962088079 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.882352941 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5294117647 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0641315669299 0.236089414692 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0262659194572 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0270075227437 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0417155628604 0.150856017488 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0341315085329 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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