TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task
In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper.
The Reading and the lecture are both about the adoption of electronic databases for medical information, which is an innovative way to store medical papers. The author believes that this new technology will benefit doctors and patients with many advantages. The professor brings into question the claims made in the article. She considers that there are no assertions about the benefits of this new electronic databases.
First, the author comes up with the idea that electronic records could decrease some costs. It is mentioned that transportation will be much cheaper, and there will be more space for more important papers. However, the professor argues that there will not a significant change with this, because doctors will keep printing large amounts of certificates as a legal resources. She suggests that also doctor will be still using printed papers.
Second, the author states that medical error could be reduced with this measure. The article notes that the doctor’s handwriting is not always understandable, as a result, legibility will be an advantage. Meanwhile, the professor rebuts this argument by pointing out that there still will be errors. She highlights that the doctors’ staff will copy the information from the medical paper, consequently, there will be misinterpretations.
Finally, the author contends that these databases records will help the doctor and patients to get the information out of the databases whenever it will be necessary. The professor, on the other hand, posits that the access will be difficult because of the legal’ constraints. She puts forth the conception that the process to take off some documents will be more complicated.
In short, the professor refuses the author opinion by showing some examples about the disadvantages of electronic databases.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tors and patients with many advantages. The professor brings into question the clai...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'resource'?
Suggestion: resource
...arge amounts of certificates as a legal resources. She suggests that also doctor will be ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, second, so, still, while, in short, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.4613686534 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 30.3222958057 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1373.03311258 113% => OK
No of words: 283.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46643109541 5.08290768461 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99398607257 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530035335689 0.540411800872 98% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5693680646 49.2860985944 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6875 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6875 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06452816374 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252684779036 0.272083759551 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0893108863285 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0725505915149 0.0662205650399 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141892104503 0.162205337803 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411642688645 0.0443174109184 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 53.8541721854 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.15 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 63.6247240618 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.