TPO46-Integrated-In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
The reading passage states that adopting medical record systems by doctors, instead of previous paper forms, is beneficial in many ways. However, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on the ideas presented in the reading and finds them uncertain.
First, considering the reading the storing and transfering costs have been reduced regarded to keeping record computerized, with no need to copy or fax the information, and also the records are accessible from everywhere. In contrast, the professor in the lecture contradicts the idea and further explains that most of the doctors are yet keeping paper records and backups to avoid any loss in data. Therefore, there is not any significiant cost reduction in storing costs.
Second, the reading claims that the the possibility of occuring medical errors, such as not inproper handwriting, have been decreased since the forms have been standardized using the computers. On the contrary, the profesor in the lecture refutes the information presented in the reading and makes the point that most doctors are still using pen and paper for writing information and other staff are in charge of entering the information to the computer so the possibility of errors yet exists.
Third, the author in the reading mentions that huge medical databases can be created and used for research purposes which is more convenient than previous way of collecting information by going to doctor's offices and asking fot their paper records. On the other hand, the speaker contradicts the idea and adds that accessing the patients medical records need many strict and complicated procedures of obtaining permision due to the strict privacy laws. It needs permission from each patient to access their medical infromation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 33, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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Line 13, column 33, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... Second, the reading claims that the the possibility of occuring medical errors,...
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Line 19, column 198, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'doctor'.
Suggestion: doctor
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, third, in contrast, such as, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 7.30242825607 205% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 22.412803532 45% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1496.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36200716846 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74898010404 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 145.348785872 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551971326165 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 448.2 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.8079091627 49.2860985944 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.6 110.228320801 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9 7.06452816374 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.404039029385 0.272083759551 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14436443976 0.0996497079465 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702161257986 0.0662205650399 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223549272478 0.162205337803 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0686576210418 0.0443174109184 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.3589403974 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 53.8541721854 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.0289183223 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.2367328918 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.7273730684 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.