TPO-44 - Independent Writing TaskSome people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing thi

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TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Allocating time for family and the ways to spend that is one of the most controversial topics in this busy world. While some people believe that the remained time should pay for playing games or doing sports, others think that we should utilize this time for getting families together to achieve goals like improve children's performance in school. I firmly believe that it would be more beneficial if parents and children are jointly working on school assignments.
In this ensuing paragraphs, I argue how different reasons affects on family relationship in detail.

First, beside the school time for learning the materials offsprings need extra time at home to review and complete the homework. By parents help in their learning process, each child can experience both joy and improvement in his or her courses.

Second, allocating time for children help parents to have a close relationship with their entire family and have a topic to discuss with each other. Recently I read a magazine on the subject. According to what I read, children have better performance at school if they regularly talk with their father and mother about their assignments, they have more confidence outside the home, and less feel the loneliness.

Finally, the costs of living in this world are continually increasing, and it is vital for each family to seek a new way in order to control their expenses. One way that enables families to save their money is avoiding to employe private tutors that would cost too much.

All in all, families can spend their family times in different ways, and one is doing a school assignment together. As mentioned above, it has various benefits for families in both economic and psychological aspects.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 10, column 218, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oth economic and psychological aspects.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, second, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1446.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 285.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07368421053 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64972457438 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3011999557 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.230769231 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84615384615 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258485869639 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864085479515 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0817642881112 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116787999137 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0928819230098 0.0645574589148 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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