TPO 45: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and ex
Throughout the history, children were depended on their parents to make deciosions for them, However, the important point is the time of their decision-making independence. From the very first moment of the existence of human, they depends on their paretns for all of their primitive requirements such as food, place for living, safety and the likes. In addition, making decisions is one of the most important samples in which children depended on their parensts. All of us know it is a totally bad habit for a person to be dependent on his parents, And it will lead to many problems in his relationships and specially in his important life’s events and situations. I believe young people were much depended on their parents to make decisions for them in the because of two main reason which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First, the parents were too strict in the past in their treatment with their children, which they didn’t allow them to be free in experiencing the things that they believe is not correct, or is not good for them, And this manner led to more dependence on them. For example in the past parents would punished if they had donesomething bad, they restrict them in many ways.
Second, the differences between the generations were not as much as it is now, And this differences make open-minded parents to accept that the things has been changed alot to the past, And they have to teach their children be more independent in making decisions for their life for example they know that they should remind them this fact that they are not always with them and they don’t know all the correct answers to their new life’s problems.
To make the long story short, there are many reasons that nowadays young people are more independent in making decisions which in my view it is a very good thing. And it is very helpful for young people in their future lifes and specially in their relationships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'depend'
Suggestion: depend
... moment of the existence of human, they depends on their paretns for all of their primi...
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Line 3, column 305, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'punish'
Suggestion: punish
.... For example in the past parents would punished if they had donesomething bad, they res...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, for example, in addition, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83880597015 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70554820495 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465671641791 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.002799961 48.9658058833 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 162.1 100.406767564 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367452783946 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18808759021 0.076458572812 246% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.097491142353 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248804989534 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752470406637 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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