TPO 45. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
decision making is one of the critical concerns of people around the world at any age. Needless to say that young people need some help because they are low experience people. Some people may find that teenagers are really much dependence on their parents' decision making from the past, since they think it is crucial to take correct decisions all the time. However, I firmly believe that young people are better than at any time could get the best decision. The following underlying reasons are going to substantiate my stand-points.
The first fact that holds me this concept is that higher education which today young people mostly have. It can be illustrated that everywhere people have more knowledge about life and its consequence they could make the better decision independently. In fact, the best way they make a perfect decision is to know about it or read and learn. For example, when I was persuading my family business at the bakery equipment distribution company a few years ago, I realized that we have weaknesses in our product selling; so, I call one of my genius friends on the networking and economic field to give me some advice. After a while, I make the perfect decision to design a website to sales our products online; therefore, I become a young start-up after one year and got a reward from the government. Thus, this opportunity couldn't happen if my higher education, as well as my friend ones, wouldn't gain in the university, or I was depending on my dad's old-fashion trade.
Another reason is that lots of high technology could help young people whom like to be a success. I read several articles about how to become successive parents at Iranian society journal four months ago. They analyze the various impacts of perfect parents; hence, they assume that becoming perfect parents doesn't mean that make your child become an engineer or doctor. In fact, best parents are who make their children's minds free from sad and unhappiness in order to help them to become anything they want in the future. Therefore, with today's high technology and internet young people could make perfect decisions independently. Also, with modern technology parents could observe their children's life totally and rarely become seen since some of the experience is crucial for teenagers. I can remember my personal experience when I was studying in power electronics at the Sharif university nine years ago, my father couldn't advise me to give the best decision since he doesn't know more about my major. So, he says to me '' become a success and be perfect human entire of your life''. Therefore, it seems reasonable that a teenager could make the best decisions if they want.
In conclusion, though some may oppose the concept today young people are better to become independent. Not only because the could make a perfect decision by higher education, but also they can use lots of technology to become a success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90303030303 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59542579899 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494949494949 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.0 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4715044451 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.318181818 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308017644988 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10518339949 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736103667632 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215973864213 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0581399285771 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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