TPO 46: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In our society people are subjected to lots of external factors that could easily impress them and orient their behavior and notions. A controversial question regarding this issue is whether the opinions of celebrities mean more to youngsters rather than older people or not. I do believe that youngsters are more impressed by athletes and renowned figures than older people. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently elaborate on my viewpoint through some apparent reasons.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that there is a huge difference between youngsters and older people and consequently they have their own specific stimulus. One of the most obvious differences between these two groups the level of their overall knowledge, experience, and insight about different issues. As you know when someone is in the pinnacle of success and fame some groups of people follow their thoughts and orientation without deeply think about them. Also sometimes the media exaggerate these characters and intensify the receptivity of some groups, especially youngsters, to the opinion of these figures. It is mainly due to the fact that young people are not fully matured and do not have deep insight into some matters. Therefore they are blindly more open to the opinion of celebrities and follow them. On the other hand, older people have a broader horizon about issues and the opinion of famous people can not easily impress them.
Another equally important and clear point coming to my mind is the matter of age. In each stage of life, human has different interests, concerns, and priorities. In this regard, there is an obvious discrepancy between the interests of young people and older people. For instance, youngsters are very careful about their appearance and like to appear up to date. Therefore, they take celebrities as their role models in fashion and other issues and follow their lifestyles and their opinion in these areas is important for them and young people try to track them in social media. However, older people have drastically different concerns and preoccupations. They try to live their own lives and the celebrities' opinions do not matter to them.
To sum up, considering the previous paragraphs, I believe it is reasonable to draw the conclusion that the opinion of celebrities is more important for youngsters than older people. It is mostly due to the fact that young people are more receptive to external stimuli and also they have different interests than older people and their desires are closer to that of celebrities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, for instance, you know, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13636363636 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70233287409 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471291866029 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6898021622 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.35 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233557388832 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796628273935 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576262823386 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169472560221 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394010187435 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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