tpo 46
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
yes, I agree with this statement that proposed. when we are young, our vision about any thing is different than when we are older. the young people are very active and they are excited about doing new things or new job. the young people follow ways on their own way. also we can say this time for young people is the best time for experience. celebrities mostly have characters and some behavior, this specifics can attract the young people who are looking for testing the exciting things. this characters like the star of a movie or a series on the television or a special athlete who the young people praise them and take pattern of their lives. in other hand, the old people had spent this ways which the young people want to take. when we get older, we do not have much energy and time and motivation for following the famous persons. the world of older people is filled by many work and being worry about bigger things than seeing and following the celebrities or simulating their shape or their make up or their clothing style because they know, there is very important things in real life than virtual life or movies scene while the young people minds have many space for thinking about virtual life. I think many of us prefer to live in the virtual life than real life because that would be much easier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... time for experience. celebrities mostly have characters and some behavior, this ...
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...e them and take pattern of their lives. in other hand, the old people had spent th...
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...ation for following the famous persons. the world of older people is filled by many...
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...scene while the young people minds have many space for thinking about virtual life. I thin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, while, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 52.1666666667 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1074.0 1977.66487455 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 238.0 407.700716846 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51260504202 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.92775363542 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.07977675846 2.67179642975 78% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 212.727598566 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550420168067 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 331.2 618.680645161 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.6019038948 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6363636364 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6363636364 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199871408452 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851385501836 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0338042636496 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199871408452 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 86.8835125448 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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