It goes without saying that everyone can be affected very simply because they pay attention to their surrounding environment. Celebrities play a crucial rule in this circumstance due to their social positions. In this regard, one question arises that the effects of famous entertainers and athletes on younger people are more than they are on older people or not. From my perspective, youths are more influenced by the opinion of celebrities. I will elaborate on my opinion through two strong reasons.
The first reason to be mentioned is that youths follow the celebrities and their lives more than older people. It means that younger people tend to match to new fashions and modern life.So, they like to follow the opinions of famous people and learn from them how to behave and how to cloth and so on. Old people do not have enough energy and enthusiast to spend for this concept. They have their own manner in life and also it is hard for them to change their ideas and notions because they passed most years of their lives. Furthermore they find themselves no needy to the opinions of another people. For example, I always follow the news of celebrities and it is important for me how I can be matched to new modern fashions and I love to behave like celebrities. However, my father dose not understand this subject and always tells me I am a crazy person.
The second reason is that young people are more exposed to the news of celebrities because they utilize social medias more than older people. Consequently, they affected by their opinions more and more. Foe example, youths follow celebrities in Instagram or Facebook and then watch their posts, photos and videos every day. Furthermore, youths want to be successful like them and have their life styles. However, older people are less familiar with internet and social media so they less access to the celebrities' world. So, it does not matter for them what celebrities do or think.
To put it briefly, I believe younger people are more exposed to the opinions of celebrities because they enjoy to follow them every day and also their opinions and their life styles are more accessible among social media for younger people. It goes without saying that older people can affected by famous people too but not as much as youths. Lastly, if celebrities suggest youths perfect things and life style would continue their lives correctly.
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...he opinions of celebrities because they enjoy to follow them every day and also their opinions ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, lastly, second, so, then, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87073170732 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51340368751 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456097560976 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3725320725 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0952380952 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5238095238 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2380952381 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248194560816 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858137918586 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734939013687 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178396144961 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00392766909123 0.0645574589148 6% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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