In our modern word there a lot of factors that influence our understating of life, believes, personality. One of the main influencers are celebrities, people who gained success and have an enormous number of fans and followers. However, many believe that famous entertainers and players point of view are only important to teenagers, and I completely agree with this opinion. I will try to explain why in the following essay.
First of all, the majority of celebrities fans are younger people, who are more connected with their idols throw social media. Nowadays every teenager follows celebrities life on a variety of online platforms such as Facebook, Twitter, and YouTube and so they pay more attention to their opinion than older people do as they do not have the time to scroll down the internet pages and read about some actors or singers. My own experience is a good example of this. I spend a lot of my leisure time on twitter reading what celebrities think about a certain social situation and take it as the right opinion. However, my parents rely only on their beliefs and do not care about what famous actors and athletes think.
In addition, teenagers are more likely to be influenced by famous people due to their lack of life experience. People in their teen ages do not have a fully formed character and often look for an opinion to follow and famous people are the best target because they are well-known in the society. On the other hand, when someone gets older and mature enough he starts to think on their own and develop his sentiment. For instance, I always thought that getting a higher education is waste of time because my favorite actor holds that opinion too, but as I grew up I realize that he was wrong.
By way of conclusion, I strongly believe that celebrities point of view is more important to teenagers than adults. This is because younger peoples do not have their own point of view and more interested in following celebrities life on social media.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...f view and more interested in following celebrities life on social media.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, so, well, for instance, in addition, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1649.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76589595376 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58273664633 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534682080925 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 528.3 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1072781969 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.933333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0666666667 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232527876644 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738360552419 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586099568409 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14118621449 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0155294899074 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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