TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

All of us want to be more success, and we all agree that famous people's opinions is very important. However, people's view get different when it comes to the question that whether these opinions are more important to younger people or older people. As far as I am concerned, I believe that the opinions of celebrities are more essential to young people, and there are some reasons to support my view.

The first reason is that younger people are more willing to change their life. When people graduate from college, they do not have too much burden to think about, which means if young people have the motivation to become success in their life, they can focus on their goal and strive for it without distraction from other factors. However, older people need to think about more before they start a change in their life. For example, it is unreasonable for older people who have a family to support give up his current job and start a new company in different area, even some famous people told them this area is full of opportunities. Old people are more confined in their ordinary life than younger one. So that they are less likely to take other's advices and start a change.

Furthermore, younger people can improve themselves more than older ones, especially for athletes. In track and field area, when people's age gets older, their can not run as fast as when their are young. So other famous athletes's advices about training method or choosing of food source will not benefit older people as much as younger one. Hence, younger people can enhance their performance more than older people even they take on the same advices from others.

Most of us draw on our past individual experiences to judge other's opinions. We have to admit that, due to older people's richer experiences in their life, sometimes they can judge other's opinions more wisely and clearly. But younger people's judgement can also improve when they grower older and gain more experiences in their area.

Overall, advices from celebrities are more helpful to younger people than older one, it is the fact that younger people are not only willing to take a change in their life, but also have much more space for improving, and when they gradually experience more things, they will gain more wisdom to judge celebrities's advice.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 187, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...lder, their can not run as fast as when their are young. So other famous athletess ad...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'even so', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.20871559633 0.229887763892 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.146788990826 0.158761421928 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.137614678899 0.0866891130778 159% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0733944954128 0.046263068375 159% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0802752293578 0.0685040099705 117% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107798165138 0.118717715034 91% => OK
Participles: 0.0045871559633 0.0351676179071 13% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.33359783671 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0389908256881 0.0309702414327 126% => OK
Particles: 0.00229357798165 0.00188951952338 121% => OK
Determiners: 0.0389908256881 0.0887237588012 44% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0183486238532 0.0209618222197 88% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0183486238532 0.0139019557991 132% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2309.0 2387.08602151 97% => OK
No of words: 397.0 408.028673835 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8161209068 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.319899244332 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.219143576826 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.11838790932 0.174417080927 68% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0730478589421 0.112833075102 65% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33359783671 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468513853904 0.524397521467 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 50.1601172406 59.2087087015 85% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 23.3529411765 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7957445256 48.84282405 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.823529412 120.699889404 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3529411765 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.588235294118 0.644075263715 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 45.2672988591 45.7405998639 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.06870229008 1.45489161554 73% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430854783717 0.300154397459 144% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.156535936683 0.103427244359 151% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0893158486211 0.0752933317313 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.585717020449 0.497263757937 118% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.146539539783 0.151897553556 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187223049019 0.114077575197 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763035470949 0.0781384742642 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.32317812964 0.336927656856 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0460119120195 0.067059652881 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299053073526 0.210909579961 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833567838495 0.0618886996521 135% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 6.0 2.75985663082 217% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.6433691756 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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