TPO-46 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and exam

Benefit from the rapid expansion of Internet technology, celebrities infiltrate everywhere nowadays: on television, in magazines, online, and so on. They are an essential part of contemporary life. They are alluring, of course. Nevertheless, they do engage in poor behavior in public as the wrong role model. Hence, it is an issue for their fans, especially on kids. Celebrities have significant influence over their followers, so their careless decision negatively impacts their fans' behaviors and futures.

To begin with, children's ability to imitate the actions of others is a dominant form of learning because it prompts parental interaction and helps them to learn about the social environment. This is a particular problem when celebrities are getting about inappropriate behavior. Some actors who play roles in teen TV shows may dress inappropriately in their free time, contributing to the wrong body image; it is merely a tiny portion of an iceberg of lousy celebrity influence. In today's media-focused world, it is easy for kids to receive these kinds of information. Therefore, they would directly cope with someone famous they like in such behavior and make a wrong choice.

Furthermore, there are also problems with teens' futures. Children look up daily on screens with the wealthy and famous lifestyle of famous people has encouraged youths to want to become famous, not even a career. As children grow into adolescence, they begin to make decisions that will impact them later. However, most celebrities who live in lavish homes and have masses of cash do not precisely give children realistic expectations about the future. In 2017, a survey was conducted at the University of Cambridge of 1,000 teenagers. It merely had one question:"What would you like to do for your future?" More than half of those children wanted to be famous in the future. Consequently, it will bring a time bomb to society, if more people want to be celebrated rather than helpful and beneficial to communities.

Additionally, according to many psychological studies, both illustrate linking elders and youth can provide advantages for both groups, such relationships can help children to fill critical thinking, problem-solving and social interaction. They are crucial to success in school and work, and they enable people to contribute meaningfully to society.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, of course, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2168.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39303482587 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09358338532 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624378109453 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7114149858 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.238095238 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1428571429 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151884590429 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433738592373 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433229404022 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0816499353362 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365077981934 0.0645574589148 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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