TPO-43 - Independent Writing Task Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the meeting leader says something incorrect In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do?-Interrupt and correct the mistake right away-Wa

Telling people that they have made mistakes, in many cases, is tricky to each. Mistakes are the way for individuals to learn. None in wants any errors which cause people to feel harmful, but it does occur reluctantly. The argument provided three options to deal with this type of situation. In my opinion, the appropriate selection is communicating with them in private as they finish a mission. It is better to correct people gentle in whatever cases, rather than being aggressive or mute.

First, correcting people in public straight away is cruel. It merely brings embarrassment to them, which make them afraid about mistakes. This sense of shame defeats their self-esteem and destroy their ambitions; it felt as if forcing them to admit a crime. As a result, people would prefer to live and act in ways to prevent mistakes and fear to expand their comfort zones or jump outside their protective boxes. For example, I had corrected one of my students in front of a crowd, thereby she felt embarrassed and leave my class later. Without doubts, here, I did inappropriately and caused an irreversible injury to my student; besides, this is also unfavorable to encourage my student to be a positive as mistakes come up.

Second, the vital lesson in all mistake-making is to learn from it rather than neglect it, which means keeping silent would direct people toward endless abysses. Progress will be a winding path, but if people could continue learning from their mistakes along the way would help them receive improvements. If all people stay silent-no one point out an error, it would otherwise be a risk to society. The fallacy would thus be the truth because the balance of truths has broken. For instance, in the dystopian novel ‘Nineteen Eighty-Four’ which written by George Orwell-1984, it described a situation absurd, all individuals, there zipped up their mouths and blocked at the door to truths although they knew something was incorrect. As the novel mentioned, “Truth is a thought crime, big brother is watching you.”

After analyzing various factor, it is better to correct people through gentle right manner and to help them to realize mistakes and be brave to accept it, because errors and flaws play a crucial role in people’s development, and it is gifts for each which helping people to grow far better and come close to truths.

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Average: 9.2 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t to be a positive as mistakes come up. Second, the vital lesson in all mistake-...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, as a result, in many cases, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01767676768 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81093502753 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603535353535 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.7249405488 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.388888889 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0828480562919 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.026784995095 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.022312797156 0.0737576698707 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0525930646233 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00332290729996 0.0645574589148 5% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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