TPO 47- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In fact, being aware of the world's events has turned into a controversial issue which schools principals have decided to plan a course for students to train more knowledgeable people. although a vast majority of people believes that knowing about the phenomenon isn't counted as a necessary routine work, others would rather read news about all four corners of the world. As far as I'm concerned. I agree with the idea that we should announce all incidents, although our lives aren't influenced by them. The reasons to reinforce my perspectives are illustrated hereunder.
The first and foremost reason of the aforementioned nation is that being aware of the occurrences which have happened in other countries contribute us to prevent the deleterious events; whereas, oblivious people usually can't predict some issues before it is going to occur. Albeit, some of these happenings presumably don't change our lives directly, they can cause people to be more ready when they encounter such situations. For instance, Amazon, one of the biggest forest in the earth, were burnt because of a special law that had been enacted in the United State, that help people of other countries, especially policymakers, to avoid from such legislations. As a result, reading other societies' news definitely teaches us to anticipated some probable perils.
Another conspicuous reason of the above-stated claim, which should be mentioned here, is that knowing about the worlds' phenomena which contain a wide range of subjects including economic topics, political issues, educational themes, etc. converts us to an intelligent person. When people study more about all aspects especially about the world's events, their knowledge will considerably be increased; therefore, a knower can comment about the facets of the today's problems in the most groups. Not only does it lead people to be known as an astute person but also people's ability to interaction will be improved as well. Hence, the more awareness about current up-to-date events, the better position in society.
All in all, one cannot neglect the fact that searching about the recent events of the globe will contribute people to make a better decision, find appropriate conditions in social communication, and harnessed feasible hazard. in conclusion, I extremely support the new determination of the school's principals; in addition, I suggest to people whether older or young to be aware more and more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, so, therefore, well, whereas, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3324742268 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86461623 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618556701031 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.7432200273 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.3125 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114702361779 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356696831441 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0273528280093 0.0737576698707 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0718409127578 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024454994079 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.95 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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