It is generally agreed that the more we are organized, the better are our /higher/ chances to succeed. In this regard, personally, I am prone to believe that the mentioned rule is particularly true in our today's hectic life which requires young people to have skills of planning and organizing things. I hold this opinion since the competition in our professional lives becomes stronger /harsher/; and the quality of our private lives also increasingly depends on our corresponding skills.
To begin with, the competition in the job market becomes harsher every year which implies that only the best specialists may acquire their desired jobs. This is explained by the fact that more educational institutions are available for studying nowadays, and there are more possibilities to pay for education for people who could not afford it in the past. Therefore, there are more qualified specialists competing for the vacant working places and only those who have necessary additional skills such as organizing and planning may outcompete their rivals. For example, in my country we have a lot of lawyers with relevant higher education, but the places to work in are strictly limited. In these conditions, the employers pay much attention to the planning and organizing abilities of prospective employees since they are sure that they will be able to choose matching workers from the existing possibilities. So, planning and organizing are extra skills which help young people to find jobs easier.
Additionally, not only our professional lives, but the family life also depends on our skills to plan and organize things properly. Thus, we have a lot of duties to fulfill at our jobs; there are a lot of small responsibilities to be performed related to our community life, and so on. The mentioned means that we will have no time for our families, if we are not able to manage our times effectively and plan our activities accordingly. For instance, I am a lawyer and work overloaded in a legal company which deals with hundreds of clients. I have a lot of every day obligations to fulfill properly, and if I do not do my best to plan and organize my daily routine efficiently, I will hardly be able to spend time with my family. Consequently, the more we are organized, the happier we are in our private lives.
To sum up briefly, the world changes all the time, and those changes do not obviously make our lives easier. In order to succeed, we have to be able to organize and plan our everyday life since without that we will not be able to have achievements in our career and in our private lives, as well
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 863, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to match'.
Suggestion: to match
...e sure that they will be able to choose matching workers from the existing possibilities...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, briefly, but, consequently, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85426008969 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84937707357 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47533632287 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.5429231813 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.352941176 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2352941176 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133210367273 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0514666591416 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0298847579542 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0883609693659 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024853753499 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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