People in all fields spent most of their working time on dealing with known problems which can be easily solved. However, the complexity of the contemporary world usually brought a plethora of uncertain problems. To better deal with such circumstances, in contrast to those who prefer to make a plan and stick to it, a throng of people try to think of a solution immediately when the accident really happens because of the difficulty in predicting everything. In my opinion, the former way carries more weight and I would like to explain my preference with the following arguments.
Admittedly, organizing everything in such a complicated world seems difficult and relatively meaningless. Firstly, it is hard to guarantee that everything works presumably because the unexpected changes happen all the time. For example, my family had a driving trip to Shanghai last month. Before the departure, we used Google map to find a route which was supposed to be the fastest way. However, what Google failed to predict is the traffic load on that day – the freeway was filled with thousands of cars and we consequently spent a whole day sitting in a motionless car. Secondly, it is undoubted that nowadays more and more employers wish their staffs to master the ability to cope with problems under uncertain cases which we should spend more time to practice. However, to say that making a plan is of less importance just because of the complexity of the world is still an overstatement, because this dilemma could be trivially solved by making multiple plans.
By organizing everything in perfect order, people can improve themselves in many aspects. Firstly, it is because that in order to make a plan, imagining all the unexpected changes and possible consequence, we will develop a strong imagination. Secondly, by acquiring some valuable suggestions, we can solidify the relationships with our collaborators especially those who are experienced. There is no reason to miss this opportunity to have the helpful pieces of advice of scheduling as well as expand our social circles. Thirdly, a good plan will enhance our efficiency. It is not hard to imagine that since we have predicted what will happen, we can save time for thinking what to do and directly follow the plan step by step. Getting more things done in a short period of time, we will seize more opportunities to be promoted or make a progress.
To sum up, despite the difficulty in planning and the lower significance, the procedure of organizing is very beneficial. As a result, we might come to a conclusion that it is better for people especially for the young to practice how to make a plan.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 766, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ep. Getting more things done in a short period of time, we will seize more opportunities to be...
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Line 5, column 838, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
...re opportunities to be promoted or make a progress. To sum up, despite the difficulty i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, well, for example, in contrast, as a result, as well as, in contrast to, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2218.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96196868009 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92299322859 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545861297539 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1825454041 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.9 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.35 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.65 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161574335031 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461680733795 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0354163233401 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109782543614 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0263865300045 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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