TPO-48 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

There are no doubts that the modern world is develop enormously at the last few decades. Take a look now around yourself, what do you see?. Reverse back for about twenty years, can you compare now the change that occurs at the last few years. This the time of technology, you can see different brands of cars with many options, train web that connects countries, smart cell phones with many applications, new generations of laptops even the normal house electrical machines, new smart televisions, digital washing machines and refrigerators, air conditioners as well.

The modern technology make the world in competition to produce the better and the better all the time. So, in order to go in parallel with the modern world the government should encourage the students and children to have the ability to imagine and organize. As it is know that the child is the most one have the ability to imagine and create and he learns very quickly rather than the adult. So, the government should introduces many facilities and money to enhance their creation.

The government should build a scientific or researches academies for the young. For example, the management department at my college was organized a conference and named it a Little Star of Science, there conference was discussed the complexity of the young people's brain and it is the evidence of intelligence. Moreover the doctors attended the conference talk about the ability of kids to discover. At the end, the conference recommended the government by the essentially of building a college for young. The government was welcomed by the idea and built a college and named it as the conference ( Little Star of Science). The college accepted many genius young people and enhance their efforts by many scientific ways by the assistance of well known professors.

Finally, the most important technique for any country to develop and go within the advanced world is to take care of their young and develop their ability.

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'developed'.
Suggestion: developed
... are no doubts that the modern world is develop enormously at the last few decades. Tak...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...ility to imagine and organize. As it is know that the child is the most one have the...
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'introduce'
Suggestion: introduce
...an the adult. So, the government should introduces many facilities and money to enhance th...
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Line 6, column 313, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...and it is the evidence of intelligence. Moreover the doctors attended the conference tal...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a college and named it as the conference Little Star of Science. The college acce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, look, moreover, so, well, for example, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0273556231 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75930259247 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522796352584 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.2335933563 48.9658058833 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.266666667 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178689546761 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574235771054 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0375584507934 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0910253817229 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300221720819 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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