Nowadays, arts and sports are very important and both considered one of the most important aspects in our life. People have different interests during their daily activities. I believe some people will support the idea that government should support the arts more than sports. However, when it comes to me I honestly believe that our government should spend more money on sports such as Olympic team than the arts for two reasons. I will demonstrate my opinion in the following essay.
To begin with, sports help people to be healthy. Many people try to practice activities like going to gym, running in the morning, going to clubs for swimming, and walking on treadmill. All of these activities help people to feel energized and active. For example, my uncle is living in Egypt and he is going to the club every day. He told me that the egyption government spent two million Egyption pounds last decay to build many swimming pools and tremendous sports area that contain many athletics tools. In addition, many citizens over there started to practice exercises in these places, as a results, many people right now are very healthy and they decreased their chance to develop diabetes, hypertension, and they avoid obesity. So, the government saved a lot of money that they used to spend on medical issues. This experience taught me that the sports can keep many people so healthy.
In addition, sports help people to reduce their stress. Right now many people are so stressed with their works and they face many problems during the day. So, they need something like practice exercises to forget about all of these issues. For instance, my brother is a doctor and he is working in a big hospital at New York. He working long day and he is facing many difficult situations with his patient. Furthermore, he has to take care of his children. In fact, he started to join the gym last month. He told me that after spending couple of hours at gym, he can feel energized, refreshed, forget about his stress. Furthermore, he can start the day after with fully power. On the other hand, one day, he tried to play music, but he could not even know how to use the music tool. As a result, he felt so annoyed and he was shy in front of people. Since then he stop practice any music activity. Consequently, practice sports was so helpful for him more than the arts. As you can see, many people prefer sports rather than arts. So, government should make a big investment in sports field instead of arts majors.
In sum, I believe that governmental agencies should give more support to sports than the arts. This is because sports help people to be healthy, and because sports help many people to relief their stress and enjoy their social life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 99, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le try to practice activities like going to gym, running in the morning, going to...
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Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
... practice exercises in these places, as a results, many people right now are very healthy...
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Line 5, column 851, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...oyed and he was shy in front of people. Since then he stop practice any music activit...
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Line 5, column 865, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'stops'.
Suggestion: stops
...s shy in front of people. Since then he stop practice any music activity. Consequent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, honestly, however, if, so, then, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72442588727 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39845938555 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48643006263 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1497131082 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.4333333333 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9666666667 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141662902193 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434778144969 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0356558851497 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918642469582 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147916552315 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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