TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

It is always sound nice to say I have many friends. Everybody likes to have a very active social life. Therefore, I do not agree with the statement, I believe that to be happy it is more important to have many friends.

To begin with, when you are able to make new friends, you never get bored and you do not have to stay isolated at home when because you always have a friend keen to spend time with you. I work very hard during the week, and on the weekends, I like to go out for a drink or a movie. Image if I had just a few friends and they all are busy the night you want to go out, you should change your plans and stay home watching TV all alone, but if you have many friends, you will always find someone who enjoys going to the cinema or a pub with you. Furthermore, if you are an easy going person and make new friends it is not a problem, you can always go to any party by yourself and make new friends when you there.

Also, have many friends can be very emotional in some situations, last week was my birthday and one of my closest friends has organized a birthday party, she gathered all my friends at her house. She gathered all my friends, even the old ones from high school. When I arrived at her place and I entered the dining room, they were all there for me, and they were a lot. It has been a very emotional moment that I cried with joy. I do not think if there were only a few friends, it would have been the same emotion. This experience made me think that I am a very lucky person to have such many friends who love me. The best way to make new friends is to go in the places we enjoy, and to do what we like, and begin a conversation with the people you meet, there is a good chance to find several common interests. Hanging out always with the same people from my experience it turned out to be very boring, for this reason, I believe that have the ability to make new friends it is critical for me.

In conclusion, I believe the more the friends more the happiness, at least this is true for me. And after all make always new friends does not mean that you care less about the old friends, they are only the closest to me, the others will become old and good friends along the way.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put before the verb 'make'.
Suggestion: always make
...east this is true for me. And after all make always new friends does not mean that you care...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, after all, at least, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1786.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.07762557078 4.8611393121 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.08572859116 2.67179642975 78% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.442922374429 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.4420141863 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.058823529 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252311086429 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887984349113 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757233040132 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160058394248 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0267410859596 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 58.1214874552 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.68 10.9000537634 61% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.39 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 86.8835125448 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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