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Dose watching telivision has positive or negative impact on young poeople's behaviors? This is a controversial issue. Some people think that television has a positive impcat on today's society because people can have fun and enjoy some moments with their beloved ones. Atlhough I understand their point of view, I wholeheartedly believe watching movies and television affects youngsters' behaviors negatively for several conspicious reasons.
One of the reasons why television has unwanted effect on young people behavior is because it teaches them to lie. Unlike years ago, students can take their calsses online insted of taking them in traditional classes. Therefore, young people sometimes lie to their parents and their family specially if they do not want to do the order their parentes give them. For example, let us say there is girl who just has started high school. She took her classes online because she thought that is convenient for her. However, when her parents call her, she always excuse herself by saying that she is doing her home work, even if she does not. If she does not watch the movie that when the main actor lied to her family, she would not learn that atroious behavior. Although watching telievision can allow people to enjoy their time with other, young people learn to unbehave from it. Because of this, movies and television affected young people negatively.
Another reason for watching movies and television makes youngsters to do not behave well is that it destory their eating habbit. Since many people like to eat especially while they are watching the television, the number of obesity among young ages increased drastically. The artical that I read reacently illustrate this. Research that has been done on 1500 of the Seattle school students about their preferece if they like to eat infort of the television. The researchers found out 70% of the participants loved to do that. So, the data shows that eating while watching can lead to davstating health problems that is not easy to cure. If people had not learned to eat while they are enjoying watching their television progarms, they would not have developed problem of weight increases. Although people can learn valuable lessons by watching television, watching it with eating snaks does have a serious, and un-wanted effects on peoples' health.
To sum up, parents should control their children and watchout for behavior modification. This is because watching television not only learns children to avoid telling the truth and teaches them certain action that could affect their health negatively.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 177, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'todays'' or 'today's'?
Suggestion: todays'; today's
...hat television has a positive impcat on todays society because people can have fun and...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'excuses'.
Suggestion: excuses
..., when her parents call her, she always excuse herself by saying that she is doing her...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1757719715 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55247509645 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548693586698 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 649.8 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6088213117 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7391304348 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3043478261 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.73913043478 5.45110844103 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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