There is no doubt that arts play a significant role in the lives of our societies since they enrich people spiritually. However, personally, I am prone to believe that athletics in particular and sports in general need more attention of the national governments in particular through providing public finance for their permanent development. I hold this opinion since sports make people healthier; and taking care of the health of population transforms to /into/ international obligation of modern states.
To begin with, sport /s/ activities are essential from the perspective of securing the health of population, and any state should be interested in financing activities which are aimed at their development. This is due to the fact that exercising trains human body thanks to which it operates better and longer. For example, I am fond of tennis and I like to play it outdoors, especially on a grass surface tennis court. This is a dynamic and active sport /s/ inasmuch as it trains all my muscles and makes me fit. Thanks to playing tennis regularly I am in a good shape without any diseases and the need to take medicines or visit doctors. So, playing sports is prerequisite of our healthy lives, and state support in this field is crucial.
Additionally, international community is more and more focused on preserving health of people, and thus it requires national governments to actively support sport activities all over the world. During the last decades international instruments were drafted so that states become legally bound to allocate financial resources with the account of the necessity to stimulate active life of people. For instance, European Social Charter on Human Rights place obligations upon its member states to provide sufficient financial resources for creating sport facilities. Furthermore, it stipulates the right of children to development which, among other things, implies states’ efforts to involve kids in sport activities. Thus, national states have legal obligations to spend money in the area under consideration.
To sum up briefly, sports are an indispensable element of our lives and need state support. The explanation to this is twofold: first, it makes us healthier; and, second, national state bodies are obliged internationally to spend money in this sphere.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tionally to spend money in this sphere.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, thus, for example, for instance, in general, in particular, no doubt, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32152588556 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99910521295 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58310626703 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5703454198 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0625 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9375 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134392320099 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449670880164 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399679354947 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0861303925307 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310811714155 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 10.002688172 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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