TPO 54- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

Allocating budget for nation’s growth is the first and foremost step a Government can do. I believe by spending money on athletics would develop nations economy while keeping their citizen healthy. Hence, it is more vital to spend more on state-sponsored program when compared to Arts program. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.

First and foremost, many people that love to play sports in order to get away from mechanical way of living and studying. For instance, many people at school at one point get bored in their studies and want to look for some alternatives. This is where sports come into play that can compensate an education with sportive skills. My brother's example is a compelling situation of this scenario. Growing up, my brother did not do well in studies however he was performing well in rock climbing. So, my parents enrolled him in a rock climbing classes in our local recreation program. In the beginning, he started off as a recreational activity and quickly his talent was recognized when he was in many intra-mural games. As a result, the coach recommended my brother to compete in a National level sponsored by the provincial funding. With the support from state funding, my brother was able to perform in national wide competition and won first place. Furthermore, he also got into well recognized university under sports scholarship. Without the government funding, my brother's talent would not come into known to everyone around the world as it is quite expensive to participate in national level where my father could not afford to pay.

Secondly, there is a growing concern of people that obese. If more money is allocated for sports than many people would benefit by playing their favourite game which will impact their health positively. For instance, recently my daughter was diagnosed as high diabetic that resulted in sudden weight gain. So, the physician recommended her to do physical exercise every day. But she was not motivated to do exercise. However, she enjoys swimming, so we registered her in swimming class funded by the city. After a while, she got into higher levels in swim class that even motivated her to do well. Because of state funded swimming program, she lost weight gradually and did not develop diabetes. Hence, if government spend money on Sports program, then they don't have to spend money on health problems.

In conclusion, allocating money on sports has many benefits such developing a sports person that can contribute a society and saving money on health care system.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: classis
...parents enrolled him in a rock climbing classes in our local recreation program. In the...
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Suggestion: don't
...pend money on Sports program, then they dont have to spend money on health problems....
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...rts has many benefits such developing a sports person that can contribute a society an...
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Line 8, column 163, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...and saving money on health care system.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2169.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02083333333 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71177665727 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548611111111 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2574442794 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.76 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.28 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14867221398 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395800913932 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468051882259 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101632642452 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051981868935 0.0645574589148 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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